ok
01) the verserapper needs a flow, cant just read words in and think u just made a song. thats called a book
02) monotone, this isnt 2nd grade poem readin, if u do sumthin, do it wit emotion or ur gonna get b*tchslapped wit words by other listeners aswell.
03.) this isnt critics about u. i actually liked ur part but yeah, tell ur friend to let himself go behind the mic, not whisper sumthin into it and call it a track
peace