Sup SV headz,

It’s ya boi X to the O - D - U - S…just droppin’ thru for a bit before I go back into hibernation mode. Droppin’ a couple tracks on you (feedback if u like…)

First Track
Xodus - Fear (contest entry did for fun)

Xodus - Fear produced by 2-Deep
link: http://www.zshare.net/audio/18310956ca4b274d/

Second Track
Xodus - Beyond (unused track in another project)
Lyrics Below…

Xodus - Beyond produced by A-314 of Anno Domini
link: http://www.zshare.net/audio/183961145e01a7ab/

Third Track
Xodus - Picture Perfect (unused version for a project)

Xodus - Picture Perfect produced by Kajmir
link: http://www.zshare.net/audio/1839631758e427d2/

Beyond Lyrics
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they say life is short…
time must be it’s cohort…
oh lord - oh lord - u gave hour the coke…
minutes a’ snort - every breath I toke…
I note - then noted - the devil or u got us open…
open - who pimpin’ me? - the need 2 succeed…
or the will 2 be free…
shit - I do need more Gs - more seeds….
of wisdom 2 plant my dreams - those trees…
yah I smoke one - don’t jack my dreams…
to furnish ur schemes…
ya boy is yearnin’ - searchin’ - 4 somethin’ beyond…
what’s gotten us this far…
this car - I cop’d - isa Phantom…
but couldn’t fathom - why I spent a king’s ransom…
just to drive a lil’ mo’ extra - vagant…
I’m bad at this - get a lil’ money…
then spend it on lavish shit…
what was the advantage - kid…?
damn I got it - cause I imagined it…
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verse2
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they say the good die young…
so I’m villianious if I live to 91…
let me cock my gun - a let me stack my funds…
can’t take it where I’m going - huh…
slums - produced a wis - dom ina swift one…
if I uplift one - then maybe hope will glisten - glisten…
like lamp posts given off emissions…
to the omniscient - instant…
ova ray of hope - in the far distance - distance…
life isa beautiful gift - can’t get one every christmas…
it’s key to listen - unlockin’ neccessities…
to survive - this devil-ish dream…
so elengantly - these edible things - require cream…
we know it rules everything - ever dream…
to be positive before the violent means…
violence sings - the trouble our mind will bring…
the trouble our eyes will lead…
what we call in life - that’s sweet…
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verse3
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they say - I’m like fuck - what they say…
oh whata day - oh whata way…
2 express my intelligence…
sometimes aggressiveness - gets there attention - kid…
today’s lessons is - Jena 6…
man it’s sick - 2 see racism - embellish wits…
let me get my whip…
no I meant the one with - the tints - on it…
some put they lips - on it…
I’ll blow once tongue tips - pistol grip…
these foul incidents - enlisting sin…
ur not listenin’ - let my grill - start glistenin’…
to catch attentions then - like candy to adolescent’s…
or wrap it ina swisha 2 inhale - my message…
b4 the ghetto gets the best of us…
gettin’ off layway - my sense of just…
tice - moral - honor…
these ghetto tendencies - I’m built off of…
(ME)

peace,
X

nah niguh - it aint that - trust me fam - 1

word - i appreciate dat…

“gotta keep hope alive” as they say that “great” music will still be heard…

Radio has been dead to me for years now…

thestatesson said:

I just listned to the contest entry. I’m not really feeling the hook man. It’s not very emotional and convincing. It’s just bla i’m sorry man. The verses could have been better I feel if you would have rehearsed more. Some words were stumbled on and stumbled over. Couldn’t hear or understand some. I hope you take this into consideration on your tracks. And this is love not hate homey. Keep grindin

LOL can’t take that as hatin’ im interested in the feedback…take a listen to the beyond track and let me if u can hear a clear difference from it and the contest entry. Then it solves like the main things u stated about the delivery…and gives me a solid idea of how to approach each track.

peace,
X

thestatesson said:

Yeah that track is much better. Only prob i saw on the verses.. You were rapping fast and it seemed rush. What i’m trying to get at is if you rap fast you still need to be able to display the emotion that is required for the track. THis sounds like you were just worried about staying on beat. When you do that it can take away from delivering a powerful verse. That’s what I mean by rushed. The chorus… their is nothing wrong with harmonizing but do it more creatively. And once again add a little more emotion to the track. stay grindin dude

lol then my ears aren’t bad then I felt the same way on the pacing when i got the track back from mixing. hmm though the emotion thing doesn’t translate too much that could be various things but i’ll take it as more “charisma” to the track instead of straight spittin’…

‘preciate the feedback.

peace,
X