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Post a track here and I will give you feedback

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6:53 pm
November 11, 2012


Guerilla Gorilla

Shadowvillian

Posts: 1032

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Drop a link and I will give some feed on your tracks. And if you want, maybe you can RTF.

Fuck black vagina, that shit’s fucking weak. I ain’t stickin’ my dick in a pile of roast beef.


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7:19 pm
November 11, 2012


idendity disorder

Fresh Meat

Posts: 4

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7:30 pm
November 11, 2012


Guerilla Gorilla

Shadowvillian

Posts: 1032

3

Beat was dope, nice choice. Lyrics and flow were on point too, maybe just a little quiet relative to the beat. Liked the concept “Beautiful” about changing the hood, it was well executed and came through most nicely on the hook. Had some good lines, “feelin lost like a set of keys” stood out to me. Felt some serious angst in this song, which chimed with the concept. It was believable.

RTF? http://www.shadowville.com/boa…..d-returned

Fuck black vagina, that shit’s fucking weak. I ain’t stickin’ my dick in a pile of roast beef.

10:37 pm
November 11, 2012


genesis

Adept

Posts: 225

LAS VEGAS

4

I spread the Gospel of Jesus without hesitation…..

12:43 am
November 12, 2012


Guerilla Gorilla

Shadowvillian

Posts: 1032

5

First of all I think the concept is money, personally I think it’s hard as hell (no pun intended) to rap about this kind of subject, and you did a sick job. The first verse had a great flow and solid lyrics. The hook was great and fit the song perfectly. The second verse was also dope, the only con is maybe a few of the adllibs seemed off, but it was very minor. My pain is lifted by the one who knows me better than I know myself” was a dope line - obviously a very personal track, and that sort of subtle emphasis and emotion came through.

RTF if you want - http://www.shadowville.com/boa…..d-returned

Fuck black vagina, that shit’s fucking weak. I ain’t stickin’ my dick in a pile of roast beef.

1:31 am
November 12, 2012


t-wils68

Journeyman

Posts: 53

Owasso, OK

6

1:47 am
November 12, 2012


lonewulf_hiphop

Disciple

Posts: 18

7

9:45 am
November 12, 2012


Guerilla Gorilla

Shadowvillian

Posts: 1032

8

t-wils68 said:

http://soundcloud.com/t-wils-d…..ft-bthakid


Beat is pretty tight, hook was simple but effective. First verse had a simple rhyme scheme, kinda a bump blah blah blah blah blah thump type of thing, might benefit from some multis and/or a little complexity. That being said, delivery and flow were nice. Second verse was similar in terms of rhyming and had a slightly softer delivery, which clashed a bit with the nature of the beat. Liked the bells over the hook towards the end, added another layer to the song. Overall it was a solid effort, could be improved by vocab and metaphors, but well-delivered.

RTF at http://www.shadowville.com/boa…..d-returned

Fuck black vagina, that shit’s fucking weak. I ain’t stickin’ my dick in a pile of roast beef.

9:52 am
November 12, 2012


Guerilla Gorilla

Shadowvillian

Posts: 1032

9

lonewulf_hiphop said:

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v…..AZt_bi5PCc


Liked the staticky intro, beat was great. Piano was nice, guitar added a cool layer. Hook was well done and properly mixed. First verse was straightforward but had a clear cut message, flow and delivery were on point. Second verse had a unique style, was pretty dope, lyrics meshed well with the first verse. Third verse also had a unique delivery, that guy had a cool voice. Overall the quality of the track was great. Fourth verse was probably the most creative, like the “E in Eminem’s name” line and the “flicking ashes” rhyme and general rhyme scheme.

In terms of the video, it was nice to have something to read along with, preciate that.

RTF? http://www.shadowville.com/boa…..d-returned

Fuck black vagina, that shit’s fucking weak. I ain’t stickin’ my dick in a pile of roast beef.

12:37 pm
November 12, 2012


turabo40

Master Shadowvillian

Posts: 2846

Hartford,CT

10

http://www.shadowville.com/boa…..production

Well i hope it doesnt bother you to be hitting links, but here it is,

Its not music,its poetry