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tell me what you think i just started so…….

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4:53 pm
March 16, 2008


chinchillakillr

Journeyman

Posts: 89

SANTA 707 ROSA CA.

1

you know we chillin no stoppin
we driving beats, cruisin, rockin
Droppin, posted up on the block n’
Police rollin down my streets
cause we drinking 40’s, busting beats
Im not lying homie im on the grind
im 5 dime we done do it all the time
N yeah i stay posted up with my stashn
Black N White Raider Colors thats the fashion
so let me kill you fast then
cause the slow death aint happenin
so as im rapin im thinking of what to say next
because this beat is to complex
so
heres whats next, i never carry around a glock, straight steady smashin
around the block, so if your tryin to get at me, you better bring your
self a glock and pop cuz i be gone before your body drop then dip from
the spot wether you love it or not,cuz ima star soon to be ridin in
many cars but for
now let me crack the window while i spark the
endo, this s**ts got me lifted letin ya know im gifted. with the
lyrical jam i follow through when the beat gives a cue let u know how i
feel bout me n not u……….
shady insane
im a big bear man
i rip through the game leave the mic with bloody stains
ill end the battle youll be sorry you came
got no time for lame rhymes hit you like runaway train,
surgical percision, no time for decision making
doctor you up theres no cure for your condition
or
the rymes you be spittin leave my stain in the game it will never be
the same way so if you decide to stay, get outa my way you know we do
it hard in the bay drinkin leanin smoking thizzin every day
heres a few lyrics,
i cant spell but spit it, hot as flames, new hell and you in it, talk bout pain nigga u cant feel it, rhymes
maken cents its a shame u cant get it,
say it aint cold, when i see you shiver,
diliver
body blows and i know you feel it,hey,thats what i do on tracks chew em
up and spit em out, you can have that back just dont get a heart attack
when i come through the back door crowd screamin they want more                      but i guess since i just started my rhymes probably had departed.

 

not the best obviously but need some feeback 

 

“ID RATHER SPEND A MINUTE OF MY LIFE THEN SPEND MY LIFE IN A MINUTE”


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5:09 pm
March 16, 2008


Uncommon Valor

Disciple

Posts: 12

2

its aight, the terminology is slightly common. but starting out and learning i would listen to jedi mind tricks. they inspired me and my vocabulary. but keep grindin. do your own thing. its just feedback. you wanted criticism, you got it. but yeah. carry on writing. consider different ways of putting the words accross. use a thesaurus to gain more advanced knowledge of certain words and extend your mind further.but thats up to you. im just explaining different techniques of improvement. keep trying homie, you’ll get the hang of it someday. and take your time when your writing songs.

12:55 am
March 17, 2008


chinchillakillr

Journeyman

Posts: 89

SANTA 707 ROSA CA.

3

thanks

 

“ID RATHER SPEND A MINUTE OF MY LIFE THEN SPEND MY LIFE IN A MINUTE”

3:12 am
March 27, 2008


zig zag

Fresh Meat

Posts: 6

4

thanks o alot man

Zig ZAg’s Back for motherfuc******

8:31 am
March 27, 2008


RapperEater

Fresh Meat

Posts: 9

5

i got some advice just believe you can and rap about all the s**t in your head youll get better dont worry stay true to yourself

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