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Trey Cat - “How Can We Stop This” (An Iraq Story)

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10:43 am
March 31, 2008


Trey Catalyst

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Birmingham

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ok so heres my first FULL song. but first i have to lay down a bit of information….

  1. Yes, i AM 13, i know i sound like a kid….I AM ONE!
  2. I aint no jamino, so it aint gonna be great
  3. It’s my first full track, so i aint gon be no jamino
  4. i know it aint great!

let me just say something, i gotta give some lil thankyou’s aswell, to JaGo, Jamino, and King Cobra for helpin me with my other projects, and giving me feedback. if its no trouble, i would like feedback from y’all that hear my track, thanks. and i aint a fake rapper, like lil wayne, i wish to either inspire / motivate with the words within my songs, so please, i know the recording quality is not great either, but please do your best to listen to the lyrics. and this story, about the war in Iraq and government corruption is a subject that i feel strongly about. and would also like to hear your opinions on it. and please only serious feedback please. thanks.

and add me on myspace aswell!! lol

ok so heres the link, the track is called "An Iraq Story".

http://profile.myspace.com/index.cfm?fuseaction=user.viewprofile&friendid=363590967

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10:56 am
March 31, 2008


Trey Catalyst

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Posts: 322

Birmingham

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that link should work lol

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11:29 am
March 31, 2008


djecko

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iight….the song aint bad……it has a nice messege…..mic quality wasnt bad at all but i think u should choose carefully which effects to use on your vocals. The reason why i say this is because the whole song sounds as if u used th "im talkin thru a phone" effect lol (thats what i call it) and the use of the echoes wasnt really needed……tho the echoes could have accented other parts of the song not just the end of sentences all the time…..flow was iight…..try to give more feeling to ur flow……u sound kinda monotone…..great track tho…..its just some problems most new artists face, vocals and effects…..other then that nice flow and keep improving

11:35 am
March 31, 2008


Trey Catalyst

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Posts: 322

Birmingham

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DJ EcKo said:

iight….the song aint bad……it has a nice messege…..mic quality wasnt bad at all but i think u should choose carefully which effects to use on your vocals. The reason why i say this is because the whole song sounds as if u used th "im talkin thru a phone" effect lol (thats what i call it) and the use of the echoes wasnt really needed……tho the echoes could have accented other parts of the song not just the end of sentences all the time…..flow was iight…..try to give more feeling to ur flow……u sound kinda monotone…..great track tho…..its just some problems most new artists face, vocals and effects…..other then that nice flow and keep improving


yo i appreciate all of that, thanks man, and yes i aint too familiar with how to work the effects on cool edit, im constantly searching tutorials on youtube n stuff lol, but yeah i agree, i would’ve put more emotion but i felt the need to tell it like a story, which was wrong i know, i will try my best to improve my next track . thanks

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12:21 pm
March 31, 2008


JaMiNo

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Hey Trey, I’m liking this track and the one you sent me. 

Take heed of what Ecko said, homie.  My man knows what he’s talking about, and I second what he said about the effects.  Try adding some backing vocals, the echo kinda gave the track an "artificial" kinda feel, if ya know what I mean.  It was put in places it shouldn’t be, like you were trying to replace backing vocals with it.  And one thing I keep pappin on about to all new artists is MIC PRESENCE.  Be confident on the mic, lift your voice and feel the music.  That track is YOURS, man.  YOU gave birth to those lyrics.  Treat the beat like a friend, and your words like family.

Other that that dawg, keep doing your thing.

Peace.

HoT oN THe BeaTS… LiKe HeaRTBuRN!

12:31 pm
March 31, 2008


Trey Catalyst

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Jamino said:

Hey Trey, I’m liking this track and the one you sent me. 

Take heed of what Ecko said, homie.  My man knows what he’s talking about, and I second what he said about the effects.  Try adding some backing vocals, the echo kinda gave the track an "artificial" kinda feel, if ya know what I mean.  It was put in places it shouldn’t be, like you were trying to replace backing vocals with it.  And one thing I keep pappin on about to all new artists is MIC PRESENCE.  Be confident on the mic, lift your voice and feel the music.  That track is YOURS, man.  YOU gave birth to those lyrics.  Treat the beat like a friend, and your words like family.

Other that that dawg, keep doing your thing.

Peace.



yo, man, they are words of advice and ecko’s, and yeah, i will take full attention of all of this, and jamino, the track i sent you, do you think i should remove the echo from that and add backin vocals? and yeah i agree with what your "papping" all the time lol, but yeah thanks both of you. i appreciate it. very much!

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5:53 am
April 1, 2008


Dezi

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Trey, I thought you had some really good lyrics. Like everyone else said work on  putting more feeling  in you’re vocals, but I really liked the song.

10:19 am
April 1, 2008


Trey Catalyst

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thanks treeze dawg, and i appreciate it all cuz now i know what i gotta do, i gotta scap the echo, produce some backing vocals on certain words/phrases that i want to stand out, and mix it better, put way more emotion in, yeah thanks for all the feedback, i cant express how much this means to me, seriously, i enjoy the community and the way it all works at shadowville, everyone has eachothers backs, and the main thing, the most important thing is being HONEST and i thank all of you for your feedback.

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11:59 am
April 1, 2008


Slantize

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Rate this kid because he came humble in his post request, not lil flash style.

Art is the Ability to Control Other’s Emotions With Your Mind.

5:36 pm
April 1, 2008


Trey Catalyst

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Slantize said:

Rate this kid because he came humble in his post request, not lil flash style.



lol thanks

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