That chorus is sick. Your lyrics and flow are both tight and sound polished, but the quality difference between the chorus and your verses lessens the track. I think if this were re-recorded and mixed better (maybe let me see what I can do with it) then it would be a really hot track. It's got potential.

anyone else?

There are parts where your flow is really on point, and others where it seems like you are trying to fit too much into the line. But overall it’s a solid track. The quality could use some improvement, but you will have that. I’d say work on the consistency in your delivery and continue to progress as far as quality goes and you will have better response for others.