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6:30 pm
September 10, 2008
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cap zero
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yo this is abab
Josh.lynn, u better watch what ur sayin it might be costin u ur life tonight
i aint playin me losin to u is a dream to u u should know it will never come true if u ever come thru my town ur’ll get guned down bitch i never clown
its not the way i get down i run this shit like kris brown ill b tippin my crown
and tellin u to kiss my brown eye done even try to front on me ill stun and stunt all over u ill call ur hol over bend her over then her walkin days will be over after this ur talkin days will be over too all ur gonna do is read and say
du-du-du-dude!! man i murder u i heard ur rude but im at a higher altitude then u lookin down at u lookin up at me watchin me cookin up a g ur never gonnab as good as me see im everything u wannbe my life ur fantasy
it my reality ur a punk ass wanneb and ur hos a cunt ass wanna g shes always been wantin me huntin me where ever i go im like ho go home to ur homo boyfriend that tryin to pretend he can go solo with a demo that gets trash faster then a car in the demo yo bro 2 more lines and u can spit ur lines noway ur hurtin me with ur nursery rymes after ur spit em ur gonna have so many fines for ur bad rymes that sound like sad crimes of hip hop!!
i could of went harder but im just goofin do what u want for real i kill a lil later ill jump on here and and spit it so clean ill make u look like queen of the queers
but real im just clownin bro this is just fun nothin personal
lol i just reread my shit it sukd lol dont rewrite yo shit just freestyle it aight
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6:41 pm
September 10, 2008
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filthylucre94
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none of that rhymed. was that a story???
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6:49 pm
September 10, 2008
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cap zero
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u dont know what sylable ryming is then u dont have to ryme a whole word dude like l-i-ke, l-i-fe, ton-i-ght u gotta think fuk i do a nersury ryme full word ryming next verse i dgaf w/e it takes i can adapt can u deal with that
see adapt that see look completly diffrent but ryme k im new so forgive aight i only been rappin a year
and the ending was super weak i know that was shit idc i gtg been on lata
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8:26 pm
September 10, 2008
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parallelrhymes
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9:07 pm
September 10, 2008
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Ex
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its suppose to be 16 lines im pretty sure and that seemed more like u just spittin away some sort of story about u makin him bend ova or sum shit
lol i think u need to repost ur 16
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9:48 pm
September 10, 2008
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shadow
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that is the worst structured text entry/paragraph put up in a while….i can see some points at where it rhymes…but for others to be able to see what where u rhyming at…you gotta break it down to 16 BARS a verse, right now…it is horrible
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parallelrhymes said:
i think josh lynn won
LOL………..Had To Laugh At That…….
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11:18 am
September 11, 2008
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parallelrhymes
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m.i.c said:
parallelrhymes said:
i think josh lynn won
LOL………..Had To Laugh At That…….
there was logic behind it though as follows:
Cap Zero
Multis- 1
Punches- 1
Vocab- 1
Personals- 1
Structure- -5
Total = -1
Josh Lynn
Multis- 0
Punches- 0
Vocab- 0
Personals- 0
Structure- 0
Total = 0
So as it stands if josh lynn was not to go he wins
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4:52 pm
September 11, 2008
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cap zero
Underling
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umm ok ill redo it but its stll going to be my first verse 1 sec
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5:05 pm
September 11, 2008
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Josh Lynn
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Yeah you’re at a higher altitude, about as high as a kite
Before you step to me again, you had best learn how to write
The utilization of punctuation might have averted this assassination
It’s blasphemy for you to make a pass-at-me in front of this rapper-nation
Pay attention to this dispensation of information in the form of rhyme
Your verse left you crippled so there’s no comin’ back like a broken spine
You seem to me to be a weak emcee and your lyrics are a pitiful excuse
You’d do your best to put two in your chest, or better yet here’s a noose
It’s no use, you’d be better off dead with a slug in your head
I’m just saying your sixteen was the worst I’ve ever read
I hope you get mad and your lyrics get fueled by your anger
Otherwise you’re about to learn a lesson ‘bout pickin’ a fight with a stranger
Run from me son, you’re dealin’ with number one
I can kill you with words, you can borrow my gun
I’m sure that you’ll need it, you’re already defeated
Parallel predicted my victory before I even got seated
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