Have you ever spit over a beat? They’re called bars, there’s a structure, a repetetive element to them. It doesn’t matter if you can spit free-form over bars, as long as they rhyme internally like you’re doing, but we type them in structure because they’re easier to read and understand your lines. It also makes adjusting certain lines easier because they’re not all cluttered in the rest of your stuff. For example, your lines with better structure would be like:
JOSH.LYNN, u better watch what ur SAYIN it MIGHT be COSTIN u ur LIFE TONIGHT /
i aint PLAYIN, ME LOSIN to YOU is a DREAM to YOU /
YOU should know it will NEVER-COME-TRUE /
if YOU EVER-COME-THROUGH MY TOWN ur’ll get GUNED DOWN /
bitch I never CLOWN its not the way I get DOWN, Ii run this shit like CHRIS BROWN /
ill b TIPPIN MY CROWN and TELLIN u to KISS MY BROWN EYE , don’t EVEN TRY to FRONT on, ME I’LL STUN and STUNT ALL OVER you /
I’LL CALL YOUR HO OVER, BEND HER OVER, THEN HER WALKIN DAYS WILL BE OVER,AFTER this YOUR TALKIN DAYS WILL BE OVER TOO /
all your gonna DO is read and say DU-DU-DU-DUDE!! man I MURDERED u /
I HEARD-UR-RUDE but im at a higher ALTITUDE then YOU /
LOOKIN DOWN AT YOU, LOOKIN up AT ME, WATCHIN ME, COOKIN UP a G,YOUR NEVER GONNA BE AS good AS ME /
SEE im EVERYTHING you WANN-BE,MY LIFE your FANTASY!
See technically you only have 10 lines, but because they’re variable lengths, they’re hard to read. I didn’t even get some of your lines until I read through them now, trying to find some structure. Structure isn’t “the same just different rhymes”, but rather structure contributes to your “listenability”, basically making your lyrics easier to listen to (and read) because they’re is method to the madness. Right now you’re just throwing out rhymes, in sentence fragments. You don’t need to write a bunch of rhyme, you need to write one piece, that goes together logically. Cohesion will save your lyrical life.
Keep up the good work. I want to battle you again after you’ve got a few more under your belt 
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