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9:46 am
February 5, 2008
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JaMiNo
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HoT oN THe BeaTS… LiKe HeaRTBuRN!
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10:03 am
February 5, 2008
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Dezi
Master Shadowvillian
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soo flash… feel free to NEVER come back, no one will blame you.
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5:49 pm
February 5, 2008
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kingofspadez
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and winner by TKO Tim "The Maniac" TREEZYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYY
(Sorry If I Offended You,Flash.)
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Spadez - Friend,Battler,Serial Rapist 
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U stated "You spit what you live, 16 bars of d**k?"… I’m just reassuring that u the 1 like d**k…
The only way u’d beat me is if I tutored yo ass… But I didn’t, so it aint no way u’ll castigate my ass..
Lil Flash I do my thang n yea im bout 2 f**k em up… Fuck with us, f**k with thus and yea b*tch i’ll f**k him up…
Hold up let me switch it up, yea im bout 2 rip em up… U kiss ass, and u rap lik trash, n yea ima pick em up…
I cum hard and like a tech i’ll come through u nigga… Im the government, you doublement i’ll chew u nigga… (no homo)
Wrap yo ass in a trash bag Hefty or a Glad bag… Blow yo ass up like some BOMBS OVER BAGHDAD…
Wow you swear that you a beast, but you won’t catch street… You a fake ass cake, quick to reach for the heat…
That s**t u spit is moutha’ f**kin ridiculous… U kiss niggas like that gay ass nigga Gangstalicious…
FUCK EM IM OUHH!!!
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FUCK DIS IF HE WAS READY HE WOULD GO 1ST
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10:44 pm
February 5, 2008
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kingofspadez
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Lil Flash - 6
Multis - 1
Vocab - 2
Structure - 1
Personals - 1
Punches - 1
No Multis.Personals and Punches werent creative.Vocab you had a few big words so i gave you an extra point for that.
Structure was all over the place.
Treezy - 16
Multis - 3
Vocab - 3
Structure - 3
Personals - 3
Punches - 4
All around it wasnt that bad Treezy.You had a lot of creative s**t thought so i give you props for that.
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Spadez - Friend,Battler,Serial Rapist
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- U stated "You spit what you live, 16 bars of d**k?"// I’m just reassuring that u the 1 like d**k//
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The only way u’d beat me is if I tutored yo ass// But I didn’t, so it aint no way u’ll castigate my ass//
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Lil Flash I do my thang n yea im bout 2 f**k em up//
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Fuck with us, f**k with thus and yea b*tch i’ll f**k him up//
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Hold up let me switch it up, yea im bout 2 rip em up//
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U kiss ass, and u rap lik trash, n yea ima pick em up//
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I cum hard and like a tech i’ll come through u nigga//
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Im the government, you doublement i’ll chew u nigga// (no homo)
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Wrap yo ass in a trash bag Hefty or a Glad bag//
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Blow yo ass up like some BOMBS OVER BAGHDAD//
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Wow you swear that you a beast, but you won’t catch street//
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You a fake ass cake, quick to reach for the heat//
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That s**t u spit is moutha’ f**kin ridiculous//
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U kiss niggas like that gay ass nigga Gangstalicious//
FUCK EM IM OUHH!!!
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FUCK DIS IF HE WAS READY HE WOULD GO 1ST
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10:50 pm
February 5, 2008
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kingofspadez
Seasoned Veteran
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WHY POST YOUR 2ND VERSE AGAIN! whats the point in that?
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Spadez - Friend,Battler,Serial Rapist
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FUCK DIS IF HE WAS READY HE WOULD GO 1ST
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10:52 pm
February 5, 2008
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Shadow
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should i even vote?…lol
treez - 18
structure - 4
punches - 4
personals - 4
multies - 3
vocab - 3
flash - 6
multies - 1
structure - 1
personals - 2
punches - 1
vocab - 1
um….so i gues…..flash lost…..surprising…
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1:36 am
February 6, 2008
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Ja-Taa the Misfit
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Flash…
I know ur only like 13 years old, but c’mon man, you gotta come up with rhymes dude… RHYMES! What I mean is, 1 word that sounds like another word… not the same word. Let me take ur 2nd verse and break it down for ya…
Bars 1 & 2 you "rhymed" d**k with d**k
Bars 3 & 4 you "rhymed" ass with ass
Bars 5 & 6 you "rhymed" f**k em up with f**k him up
Bars 7 & 8 you "rhymed" rip em up with pick em up (only slightly better)
Bars 9 & 10 you "rhymed" nigga with nigga
Bars 11 & 12 you "rhymed" Glad bag with Baghdad (which does not rhyme)
See what I’m sayin guy? Rule #1 of rapping is RHYMING… everything else follows from that basic concept. Now since ur just a kid I’ll show some mercy and not rip the living s**t outta you for the lyrical blasphemy you’ve displayed here on our esteemed battle forum… but you really gotta recognize this fundamental flaw and do ur best to work on it. Otherwise, well… ur doomed to languish in hip-hop purgatory for all eternity… and that’s a really long time. Don’t believe me? Just ask Phaze…. still can’t stand that kid.
Peace
P.S. - this is really meant to be constructive criticism, not destructive witticism.
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Electric arcs streak to restart ur deceased heart beat / That’s when I pull back the starched sheet so I can feast on the dark meat
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