"dis my first battle so i dont know how well its gonna go.."
At least your honest, though unfortunately, so am I. I did not really like any of your lines, they were too basic, plain & empty. You almost had something in your 2nd verse with some of your line flips on States, but it just didnt work out at all. For starters, what you need to do is expand your vocabulary and be more witty or creative with your rhymes.
"But who am I kidding, you’d still suck if Ja would co-write"
"and that’s why i feel you should play hopscotch on landmines"
"ask this, next time you and your parents are alone together
"if yall never would have met, wouldn’t have this turned out better?"
I know its hard to really step it up when the comp aint there, but I didnt really like ur 1st verse, but the 2nd was a big step up. Good usage of the circumstances & current events. For the good of both competitors, dont hold any punches and never take it easy on ANYBODY. its insulting to ur opponent as well as yourself. Try your best always! otherwise your just ‘practicing’ to do things half-ass. I know what you are capable of from other verses of yours Ive seen so….
On a side note, I will try to vote more on any open matches I come across. However, it is sometimes difficult for me since usually when I am on, it is at work and I do not particularly like to vote ‘just to vote’ and be done with it. There is progression to be gained in these matches and if the participants put time & effort into actually carrying out a battle, I (and many others) owe it to them to give them my/our opinions or any advice that could help them improve, especially opposed to the occasional "you suck".