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Oreocookie VS. The State’s Son

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9:30 pm
March 12, 2008


Playboy

Seasoned Veteran

Posts: 860

21

the lack of voters round here i swear!  5,000 battlers and 4 voters…go figure, right! 

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10:24 pm
March 12, 2008


djecko

Seasoned Veteran

Posts: 565

Kissimmee, FL

22

i understand ur pain….thanx for voting in mah battle ill return the favor:


oreocookie:

multis-1

structure-2

vocab-1

punches-1

personals-1

 

statesson:

multis-2

vocab-3

punches-5

personals-4

structure-4

 

 

StatesSon: 18

Oreocookie: 6

 

oreo…….ALL UR DREAMS ARE DEAD!!! 

8:10 pm
March 13, 2008


Playboy

Seasoned Veteran

Posts: 860

23

takes 1 week to get 1 vote and people wonder why i don’t really like battling.

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9:39 am
March 18, 2008


Dezi

Master Shadowvillian

Posts: 4044

Digital Velocity

24

ok so i was skimming thru the battles and saw this was never completed soooo

 

oreo= 7

vocab-2

structure-2

personals-1

punches-1

multis-1

 

states= 18

vocab-3

structure-4

personals-4

punches-4

multis-3

 

it was a close one, but states narrowly takes this one.

 

3:50 pm
March 20, 2008


Ja-Taa the Misfit

Posts: 589

25

The States Son is up 2 - 0… one more vote should seal the deal!

Yep….  just one more.

 

and by the way States, check ur soundclick email… I left ya something. 

Electric arcs streak to restart ur deceased heart beat / That’s when I pull back the starched sheet so I can feast on the dark meat

1:42 am
March 21, 2008


Dem0nEyes

Initiate

Posts: 42

26

Oreo= 7.5

vocab- 1.5

structure- 3

personals- 1

punches- 1

multis- 1

Favorite Lines:

"dis my first battle so i dont know how well its gonna go.."

At least your honest, though unfortunately, so am I. I did not really like any of your lines, they were too basic, plain & empty. You almost had something in your 2nd verse with some of your line flips on States, but it just didnt work out at all. For starters, what you need to do is expand your vocabulary and be more witty or creative with your rhymes.

 

States= 17

vocab- 3

structure- 4

personals- 4

punches- 3

multis- 3

Favorite Lines:

"But who am I kidding, you’d still suck if Ja would co-write"

"and that’s why i feel you should play hopscotch on landmines"

"ask this, next time you and your parents are alone together
"if yall never would have met, wouldn’t have this turned out better?"

I know its hard to really step it up when the comp aint there, but I didnt really like ur 1st verse, but the 2nd was a big step up. Good usage of the circumstances & current events. For the good of both competitors, dont hold any punches and never take it easy on ANYBODY. its insulting to ur opponent as well as yourself. Try your best always! otherwise your just ‘practicing’ to do things half-ass. I know what you are capable of from other verses of yours Ive seen so….

 

On a side note, I will try to vote more on any open matches I come across. However, it is sometimes difficult for me since usually when I am on, it is at work and I do not particularly like to vote ‘just to vote’ and be done with it. There is progression to be gained in these matches and if the participants put time & effort into actually carrying out a battle, I (and many others) owe it to them to give them my/our opinions or any advice that could help them improve, especially opposed to the occasional "you suck".

Midnight Movement….

11:43 am
March 21, 2008


oreocookie

Initiate

Posts: 46

27

i appreciate the advice demon. thanks. ill step i up next time