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my moneys on VS
HY stfu, youngwhoeverthefuckyouare stfu, toxic stfu, some people have no room to talk… Peace you need umm practice, a lot of practice… work on you’re structure first, maybe ryhming at the end of bars and not in the middle of em. ummmmm haha, then work on the rest later, one step at a time. practice just writing random punchlines or something.
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1:42 pm
February 26, 2008
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Diz
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I wonder if Cobra is even going to reply to this…….I mean Peace’s verse is like so……..NOT…..good…..the only thing I can say about it is that it is GAY…..GAY GAY GAY
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4:25 pm
February 26, 2008
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King Cobra
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Ok wow…I dont even know where to start//
somewhere in there’s a diss..I just done know which part//
maybe the part about me carrying a pink bag?//
wait no, maybe the part where you said "your a fag"?//
i dont know man…maybe you can point out the meanings?//
nobody likes seeing your verse like they Hy’s porno screenings//
there’s no ‘point’ to your verse like plastic needles in acupuncture//
Eight lines into my verse, and I already got better structure//
Lets see if i can win, even with all these cheap lines//
One tip for your 2nd verse? Maybe make it rhyme!//
Cant understand any of that shit like a song in reverse//
Make shadowville laugh? i’ll just let em re-read your verse//
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6:34 pm
February 26, 2008
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shadow
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lmfao
owned
king cobra - 18
structure - 4
punches - 3
multies - 3
personals - 3
vocab - 3
peace - 6
structure - 2
multies - 1
punches - 1
vocab - 1
personals - 1
no motivation for kc to better lol
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7:17 pm
February 26, 2008
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djecko
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owned
king cobra - 19
structure - 4
punches - 4
multies - 3
personals - 3
vocab - 3
peace - 6
structure - 1
multies - 1
punches - 1
vocab - 1
personals - 1
LMFAO…..no more comments
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8:28 pm
February 26, 2008
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Playboy
Kingpin
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Cobra:
multis: 3
personals: 4
punches: 4
structure: 3
vocab: 3
Cobra-17
Peace-7 (i’m being nice)
Peace-
multis: 1
structure: 2
vocab: 1
personals: 2
punches: 1
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9:25 pm
February 26, 2008
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JaMiNo
Kingpin
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DJ EcKo said:
peace - 6
structure - 1
multies - 1
punches - 1
vocab - 1
personals - 1
LMFAO…..no more comments
5 x 1 = Hmmm 5?
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9:50 pm
February 26, 2008
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King Cobra
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DJ EcKo said:
owned
king cobra - 19
structure - 4
punches - 4
multies - 3
personals - 3
vocab - 3
4 + 4 + 3 +3 + 3 = Hmm…..17?
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10:06 pm
February 26, 2008
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kingofspadez
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in Shadow’s vote its 16 for Cobra not 18.
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Hmmmm….
Fuckin with the King, Peace… that was just bad foresight
Got the voters laughin so hard they couldn’t add scores right!
Come back in a fortnight, and try to post up a real verse
As a matter of fact, fuck it…. go learn how to read first!
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Sorry Peace, but I just couldn’t resist… the temptation was just too great, and the target too easy. But for real (like for real for real), take a look at some of the better battles on this site and get a feel for what’s expected of a quality verse. At your stage of development, probably the best thing you could do to help yourself improve would be to see how seasoned emcees craft their verses… most importantly, structure and punchlines. Say it with me… "structure and punchlines". Once you get the basics down the rest will follow in time. And I agree with State’s advice… just try thinking of funny/clever punchlines to say to some invisible opponent, and nevermind about rhyming at this point, just make good jokes… then you can make ur setup line (the line before the punch) rhyme with the oh-so-hilarious joke you’ve created. See? Cool.
ok then, school’s out.
Peace
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