Neway - Putting Down Priest Part 2

Neway Is A Loco, Here He Come, Oh No //

Yo Yo, What We Gon’ Do? Just Run Bro //

That’s Priest And He’s Crew, When They See Me//

Putting They’re Heads On The Ground, Literally //

There’s No Chance Your Going To Escape This //

Hey Miss, Don’t Go, Because Class Ain’t Dissmiss //

You’re The Devil? Than An Archangel I’ll Be //

You Look Like Your Trying Hard I Do It Easy //

Please Read The Rules, You Can Only Have 16 Bars //

But I Guess You Need More To Do Some Scars //

Guess Your Rimes Are So Bad That Demon Cries //

They’re So Senseless, That They Put Out Their Eyes //

Your Structure Sucks, I’ve Never Seen It Before //

Please, Homeboy Don’t Write While Your In Dope //

This Is My Last Lines, You Got Murdered By The Beats //

I’m Going Out Of The Graveyard, Rest In Peace Priest //

          -Neway

Mad props man not bad : )

Thanks, i fucked up with them bars. Itll be a close one but good luck man and expect a round two soon.

*Bump*

yeah me too im anxious.

Aight, guess i’ll start the ball rolling.

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Priest - 10
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Structure: 1.5
Vocab: 3
Multis: 2
Punches: 1.5
Personals: 2
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Sorry for the low score, Priest, but that’s how I saw it.  Structure was all over the place, you need to arrange your lines better.  There should be 16 bars to each verse, you got into the habit of splittin them up.  I know WHY; you were trying to help us read it the way you wanted it to be rapped, but believe me, it will be readable by YOU, but not by anyone else.  Multis, were pretty basic, when they were there, which wasn’t often.  "Lee-way", "He-say".  And WORDPLAY.  There isn’t any.    It’s all empty threats and insults.  I think the Burger King line might have been an attempt at a punchline, but i’ll be damned if I understand it.

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Neway - 11
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Structure: 3
Vocab: 2.5
Multies: 1
Punches: 2
Personals: 2.5
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First battle, so not bad, but you gotta improve.  Structure was nice, very easy to read.  I’d have given you a higher score here if it wasn’t for the fact that each line didn’t have so many syllables, so it was basic structure - but decent structure all the same.  Multies did not exist, at all.  And wordplay was real minimal.  Personals I marked a lil higher than Priest, as you got at his name, but it was a weak attack.

I aint dissing either of you with these scores, but you’re new and it shows.  Just keep working at it, homies.  Nice battle for new-comers.