Deason said:

Overall this track was decent.  Not my kind of beat, but you did your thing with it.  Lyrics were slightly above average.  Flow was awkward, but on point.  Thought you could've switched it up a lil though.  Mic presence somewhat there.  Enjoyed the concept, and how you delivered it though.  Hook was good.  Props.

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KayR said:

Hey! I USED THAT BEAT! FUCK YOU! Jokes.

I don't mind this but I think the dubs in the hook create a bit of a robotic/monotonous tone.

The dubs in the verses need to be turned down a bit. But this is still pretty solid. Keep in mind, you don't always have to dub every rhyming syllable in a multi-syllabic rhyme scheme.

Thanks for the tip. I don't dub much at all so when I do it usually comes out a little weird.

Mr. Flako said:

Im bein real, I heard one of ur tracks a while back, really tried to listen but didnt make it the whole way through lol

gave this one a listen, bcuz i believe in artist development

was VERY impressed with the progression, quality wise in a BIG way, but also lyricly IMO

the breaths werent all that audible to me, i wouldnt worry TOO much about those, u dont wanna edit out too many breaths it will make ur verse sound artificial, maybe theres another word for it.

other than that I still see alot of room to improve, and if youve come this far, shit thats motivation in itself keep grindin lil homie

Thanks.

KayR said:

Hey! I USED THAT BEAT! FUCK YOU! Jokes.

I don't mind this but I think the dubs in the hook create a bit of a robotic/monotonous tone.

The dubs in the verses need to be turned down a bit. But this is still pretty solid. Keep in mind, you don't always have to dub every rhyming syllable in a multi-syllabic rhyme scheme.

^ Thats a good tip, I learned exactly that after fucking up my tracks a few times

I don't mind this but I think the dubs in the hook create a bit of a robotic/monotonous tone.

The dubs in the verses need to be turned down a bit. But this is still pretty solid. Keep in mind, you don't always have to dub every rhyming syllable in a multi-syllabic rhyme scheme.

Mr. Flako said:

Im bein real, I heard one of ur tracks a while back, really tried to listen but didnt make it the whole way through lol

gave this one a listen, bcuz i believe in artist development

was VERY impressed with the progression, quality wise in a BIG way, but also lyricly IMO

the breaths werent all that audible to me, i wouldnt worry TOO much about those, u dont wanna edit out too many breaths it will make ur verse sound artificial, maybe theres another word for it.

other than that I still see alot of room to improve, and if youve come this far, shit thats motivation in itself keep grindin lil homie

LAY OFF THE CHEESEBURGERS........AND YOU'LL BE OK!!!!

gave this one a listen, bcuz i believe in artist development

was VERY impressed with the progression, quality wise in a BIG way, but also lyricly IMO

the breaths werent all that audible to me, i wouldnt worry TOO much about those, u dont wanna edit out too many breaths it will make ur verse sound artificial, maybe theres another word for it.

other than that I still see alot of room to improve, and if youve come this far, shit thats motivation in itself keep grindin lil homie

tl2 said:

Elivated said:

save vocals

Sorry.

Elivated said:

save vocals

Sorry.

UNDEFEATED said:

bump

What he said. ^